Assignment: Personal Analysis Essay Revision

Personal Analysis Essay Revision Introduction

In the Writing module, you completed an essay asking you to reflect on your educational goals and how you planned to achieve them.

In this module, we will revisit that essay, expanding it to include outside sources found through research to help illustrate and clarify the points your essay makes.

Assignment Details

Drawing: Revision written on top left of a circle, containing an oval piece of text with an "x" over it, and a rectangular piece of text on top of it.The revised essay will be 600-850 words long. It will demonstrate a clear, supported thesis statement, strong organizational skills, and attention to proofreading and editing.

Additionally, it will incorporate 1-2 credible outside sources to help support the essay’s thesis. These sources will be cited using MLA in-text citations and the essay will include a MLA Works Cited page.


In order to successfully complete this assessment, a submitted essay must reach “Meets or Exceeds Expectations” in all categories.

Criteria Ratings
Thesis Statement Meets or Exceeds Expectations

  • contains a clearly identifiable thesis statement that drives the essay content, which has been adjusted to fit the new scope of the revision
Approaching Expectations

  • contains a thesis statement that relates to most essay content. May not have been adjusted to fit the new scope of the revision
Does Not Meet Expectations

  • does not contain a thesis statement, or thesis statement does not relate to most essay content
Sources Meets or Exceeds Expectations

  • authoritative, appropriate source(s) included in essay
Approaching Expectations

  • source included in essay which may not be relevant or authoritative
Does Not Meet Expectations

  • no outside source included in essay
Documentation Meets or Exceeds Expectations

  • quotations, paraphrases, and/or summaries are clearly attributed through MLA in-text citation
  • Works Cited page follows patterns of MLA citation formatting
Approaching Expectations

  • quotations, paraphrases, or summaries may not be attributed through MLA in-text citations in all cases
  • one or more entries missing on the Works Cited page, or Works Cited page does not follow MLA formatting
Does Not Meet Expectations

  • in-text citations and/or Works Cited page missing
MLA Formatting Meets or Exceeds Expectations

  • document formatted according to MLA specifications, including four-line header on first page, centered title, and heading on all pages showing last name and page number
  • text is double-spaced and uses an appropriate font
Approaching Expectations

  • document generally formatted according to MLA specifications, but may be missing key elements
  • text may not be double-spaced or may not use an appropriate font
Does Not Meet Expectations

  • document not formatted according to MLA specifications
Writing Process Meets or Exceeds Expectations

  • evidence that higher-order editing concerns have been identified and addressed
  • evidence that lower-order proofreading concerns have been identified and addressed, though minor patterns of error might remain
Approaching Expectations

  • higher-order editing concerns may not have been addressed
  • lower-order editing concerns may not have been addressed.  Significant patterns of error remain.
Does Not Meet Expectations

  • fundamental issues with higher-order editing concerns present in draft
  • fundamental issues with lower-order editing concerns present in draft